He who stops completely before taking the next step will spend a lifetime standing on one leg. ~Chinese Proverb
After a robust peer review session on 28/03/2024, Collins Undelikwo has won the #EasterContest with 4 nominations for his story titled Equal Distribution of Wealth In Nigeria: Is this Achievable or is it a Mirage?
Below is a breakdown of the nominations sent in by 8 writers.
- TEST AND TASTE by Peace Habila- Okwoli received 1 nomination from Emmanuel.
- EMOTIONAL INTELLIGENCE AMONG NIGERIANS AND A GROWING CULTURE OF ONLINE ABUSES by Solomon Ekoja didn’t get any nod.
- KEEPER; a love story by Oluwaseun Osanyinro received 1 nomination from Collins.
- Enough Is Enough by Chukwuemeka Oluka received 3 nominations from Solomon, Oluwaseun and Victor.
- Second-Hand Wife by Becky O. Peleowo got 3 nominations from Emmanuel, Victor and Collins.
- The Wrath Of Shadow by Emmanuel Enaku wasn’t nominated.
- Equal Distribution of Wealth In Nigeria: Is this Achievable or is it a Mirage? by Collins Undelikwo got 4 nominations from Solomon, Chukwuemeka, Peace and Becky.
- Avatar: Violence Is Not It by Ebube Ezeadum received 1 nomination from Chukwuemeka.
- Alala by Victor Oladejo got 3 nominations from Oluwaseun, Peace and Becky.
FEEDBACK
(1) The topic “resilience in keeping a love relationship” produced beautiful stories, especially with pulsating dialogues. However, they seemingly forgot the task was also for a romantic comedy (RomCom). The few writers who portrayed romantic comedy could have done more to make it cut through their stories very well.
(2) “Emotional Intelligence Among Nigerians and a Growing Culture of Online Abuses”
The writer kept to his unmistakable style. Nice dialogue. He understood the nuances of his topic. He could have done more to convincingly show the nexus between Emotional Intelligence and Online abuses and how the former impacts the latter. He should also be mindful of blanket or bogus statements.
(3) Alala
“Alala” has a compelling and intense introductory dialogue that sets the tone for the story. The writer understood the prompt even though another would argue that he fell short of this since he couldn’t establish “correcting a grave mistake.” He didn’t tie loose ends completely. Yet, this shouldn’t undermine the beautiful story. He should also be mindful of mechanical accuracy. He could learn to use short sentences to overcome this challenge.
(4) Avatar: Violence is not it
This is an adventurous topic/prompt, and the writer tried his best to do justice to it.
However, he would’ve made the story even tighter if he had images/pictures. Remember it is said that a picture is worth more than a thousand words. I also felt he used too many characters (for just 2000 words) thereby making his story somewhat ‘busy’ and unappealing to some readers.
(5) “Equal Distribution of Wealth in Nigeria: Is this Achievable or is it a Mirage?”
A very emotionally grabbing dialogue sets the tone for the main story.
The writer created vivid examples to convince the reader of what equal distribution of wealth portends, and his position on the topic wasn’t ambiguous. Save for the few typos and the dissonance between the images and the topic this is a nice story.
~ Chukwuemeka Oluka
The Easter competition is one of the most challenging and interesting competitions on this platform so far. The community, Cmonionline, introduced new criteria that involve the use of attachments like photos and links to articles published previously.
In the opinion aspect of the competition, Oluka and Collins stood shoulder to shoulder. Oluka did his thing as a research expert, and Collins also showed his capacity by weaving his article as though it were a memoir. Collins’ photos do not reflect his work completely. He wrote on wealth distribution, presenting pictures of markets with brown roofs, which one might assume represent the poverty that has become an ornament of the country, which, I believe, is understandable. But the rest of his pictures do not show the upper class, elites, or the folks who block the flow of wealth as presented by his work.
I respect Ekoja’s work. I think he is a great writer, but only one, out of the videos presented in his work connects with emotional intelligence. He also made a statistical claim about 60% of Nigerians being ignorant of his topic, but he didn’t provide any reference for that claim.
Another aspect of the competition is the part of Love and resilience. Three writers wrote amazing pieces in this section: Enaku, Becky, and Oluwaseun. Becky wrote a great story, and what caught my attention was the myth about the consequences attached to the life of a child who fell from the back of his/her mother. I applaud her for the promotion of African culture.
Ebube wrote an interesting piece that involved mafias dotted with scenes that could make you rush to Netflix and binge-watch Russian crime movies. Oluwaseun wrote an interesting piece. What caught my attention immediately was the graphic design: Two love birds and a star! That alone set the premise of the story. However her dialogue was a bit confusing in the beginning, as I struggled to know who was talking, and I suggest she work more on formatting.
In the comedy section, Peace did her thing. She provided a great dialogue that served as a backstory for the funny piece that followed. She ticked all the instructions with the photos, but not all of her pictures connect with the story completely, for example, the wedding attire does not reflect the Islamic culture the bride is from.
In the fantasy arena, Ebube wrote an interesting piece. He gave us readers crazy scenes, and although I hadn’t gotten the time to watch the real movie to the end, I saw references that I caught on Twitter regarding Iroh and his tea culture. He could have used a podcast that reflects the story, which happens to be a fantasy, not a business article.
~ Victor Oladejo
Peace sent in her feedback via this document.
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